what do you think of my rap? for a newbie?

[jay]

When I was 8 years old my parents left me for they spouse how they left me tramautized looking back at how im remincising now. They told me I wouldn’t amount to nothing pshh look at me now. I had to be my own parent growing up. You guys werenet there for me at all. When I was 8 I had a ruff life I had to take care of my little sister when I was only 9 . I had to grow up fast and it was kinda hard to do. But looking back at how I did what I did im proud of myself. My parents never wanted to be bothered with me. But its funny because I went from special ed to regular classes in college how im about to get my degree. When it was my birthday or Christmas how yall never gave me a call. Now im about to start making money how my phone rings off the wall. I don’t want nothing to do with yall so just leave me alone. I did good without yall in my life thus far so I don’t need yall yall did enough damage to me. But im glad yall left me. Because my grandma told me I could be whatever I wanted to be. And she was right and you should be proud of me. So im out right now and hope you listening to this song and feel bad about what you did. And for the record not im no longer your kid

 

[Tyrone Biggums]

buy a webcam or camera or something and sing it yourself, so I can tell the sound ur trying to give off. Other than that I like it.

 

[WMC-90]

its okay lyrics but sounds like a life story not a rap lol