Wording on coupon- any suggestions?

[Top Cat]

Make an appointment before ________ for a 60 minute massage and recieve an additional 30 minutes during the same session FREE

No cash Value, must present this card at time of service


To me this sounds kind of... choppy? I just dont want it worded in a way where they think they can get a 30 minute session at a later date. I'm offering a 90 minute at the 60 minute price. How do I word that?

Thanks in advance for anyone's input, I appreciate it!

 

[xxx_wowz_xxx]

Limited time offer! 90 minutes for the 60 minute rate. Offer is valid through __________.

 

[Suzanne]

That is awesome, Sharon, THANK YOU

 

[Rasiklal]

That is awesome, Sharon, THANK YOU

You're welcome. I wish it was that simple when *I* need to reword something I just wrote, lol. Guess I'll come ask you next time! It really is easier from a distance!

 

[erskine]

next time you have writer's block, post it here

 

[sweetlilbrat26]

next time you have writer's block, post it here

Okay! Though usually it is that first sentence that I just can't spit out. I should be working on my July newsletter right now. But I don't have the first sentence. Wanna throw me a first sentence??? :? :

Last month was tips for gardeners....for keeping themselves from pain when working. I don't have a July idea. Maybe how to deal with that crick in the neck after watching fireworks? :roll:

 

[joeben7]

Beat the heat with a cooling moonstone facial massage????

do you do stone work?

 

[Charlotte B]

Beat the heat with a cooling moonstone facial massage????

do you do stone work?

Not at the moment, since I only do outcalls. Someday I'll use stones again, though!!!

Feel free to keep the ideas coming, lol.

 

[Thong]

Well.. if you just wanted to use the cool stones for the face, that wouldnt be too much extra to carry- just a small cooler with ice & water and the stones- and you could charge X amount more to incorporate during normal session?

Or- you could get some sort of cooling aromatherapy (mint) for a foot massage- again to beat the heat

I'm just trying to think what I would like during the hot summer months.

 

[MattMCFC]

Make an appointment before ________ for a 60 minute massage and recieve an additional 30 minutes during the same session FREE

Spelling error - receive

Just in case this was a cut/paste from the original proof.

 

[Shimmering]

I did catch that spelling error, thanks
I can never get the right order of ie or ei!! I must have been sleeping that day during spelling class!