Ms RR you are damn good. Much quality writing and thoughts.
In a bit I will send you 'redlines' of some of your text. I dont know if you are editing on the go, but if I reiterate some of the excellent points above, I apologize.
First, I just wanted to share some general thoughts on the power of language and how to face the ENEMY.
1) Do NOT let the enemy :grrrrrr:define jargon. For example, always challenge the "selling" their bodies term. My fav SPs prefer the term "leasing'. For sure 'selling' is slavery by another name.
2) Up-grade/control the jargon (obviously the latter is a long term goal). We often use the term 'girls' and hopefully most of us without any derogatory connotation. BUT to many it connotes 'child' and the conflation of children and adult free-choice sex workers is one of the enemy's deadliest weapons. "WOMEN" (I am trying harder). Men like Perrin are "Condescending Patriarchs:bad:".
3) Why edit something once when you can do it three times? (best the next morning). As a happy massageplanet
:, I obviously do NOT follow this. But, if you are trying to change the world- hone your weapons!
4)AVOID using "I", especially at the start of a sentence. Use 'WE' whenever reasonable.
If my redlines seem extreme, you should see what I do to my own writing (when being serious)!
And if it strikes you as the meanderings of fussy, senile John- that's ok. Much respect for what YOU :great:are doing.
More later.